September 8th, 2015, 11:47 am
Results Of The Fourth Fan Art Contest!
After months and months, and hiatus after hiatus, the fourth (and possibly even final depending on how I feel) art contest has officially been concluded! That means it's time to judge the results, so let's get straight on to it!
The first entry I received belongs to NarNarTheGreat! His entry involved a "what-if" scenario for Pay Day. It's an interesting idea but it's not a very great execution, admittedly. The clear goal is to tell a joke about how NarNar wants Keito to live by not involving him in Infiltration at all and sending him to the Popopo Islands instead of Kirby. However, the joke falls flat in how Kirby is written as more enthusiastic about the vacation in general, which wouldn't really lead to the conclusion of giving it to somebody else. If I were to want to write a joke like this, it would've been more appropriate to have Kirby suggest giving it to somebody else and give Keito's name as an example, rather than having the Waddle Doo interpret Kirby's excitement for unappreciation. Speaking of which, why is there a Waddle Doo? This is clearly meant to be a scene from Pay Day, but the only time I had a Waddle Doo working at the castle was in Lessons Learned. That Doo should've realistically been Bandy instead.
As far as the art aspect of the piece goes, it's decent. The shading is minimal but works well enough, but the posing and body shapes of the three characters needs some work. The feet are misshapen, the eyes are irregularly oval-esque and don't follow the curvature of the bodies, and the hands are rather small for the bodies. The background itself is good, but very questionably blurry. If you want to lead focus onto the characters, it's better to slightly dullen the background's colors rather than blur it to extreme degrees such as this. Finally, some of the grammar in the text bubbles isn't good. Keito's name is misspelled, and there are two periods at the end of the Doo's sentence, when there should either be three or one. There is also a random comma in Kirby's sentence that shouldn't be there at all.
As a whole, this is by no means a bad entry, but it's still got a lot of flaws.
This next entry is from Hi(: (Guest). They made a human design for Caiya, which was one of the acceptable forms of art that I put in the rules. In the future, I'd recommend digitally touching up traditional art that you scan into your computer, but for now, I'll just look at what was given to me. The art itself seems heavily anime-inspired, but there are some issues with it. The extremely angular face just doesn't seem to fit the character of Caiya, for one. A more feminine face build would be more appropriate here. She also appears a bit wall-eyed. The proportions for most of the body are sound, though the legs feel a bit stiff, and the neck is definitely too long. As far as the design itself goes, I like the hair aspects, and while I question the excessive use of snowmen in the design, it's not necessarily a negative, it's just kind of weird. I get that that represents her ice powers, but there are other things that could've worked better than a snowman. With the exception of the doughnut, you could theoretically say this is a better gijinka form of Clare from 20 Times Kirby than it is of Caiya. The only other two things I want to point out are the weirdly-claw like hands, which are angled at a weird position and do not look natural, and the fact that the book she's reading is backwards, with the cover on the wrong side of the book (and the text on the other side doesn't match the perspective of the book itself). I respect the idea behind this entry, but there are definitely a high amount of artistic flaws. Definitely some great potential here, but more practice is needed.
Our third entry comes from SuperSkratchKat, and he brings us a classic scene: Saia recklessly piloting her Warp Star, to the chagrin of Raize. This one's a very simplistic piece that does it's job very well. It takes some liberties with how the Warp Star is driven, and Saia's confident expression is perhaps a bit exaggerated, but those would be extremely nitpicky to count against the entry. On the other hand, though, the Warp Star itself is drawn rather angularly, which is very contrary to the actual design of Warp Stars, and the star shape itself is a bit misshapen. I'm also not fond of the inconsistent style of eyes between Raize and Saia. As a whole, though, those are my only complaints, so I'd say this is a pretty good entry, all things considered.
This next entry is by Kirby CC, and comes from the Technical Difficulties scene of Jayk getting flung out of the Halberd on a Warp Star by Caiya. While also a pretty good entry as a whole, there are still some issues. The Warp Star itself is again somewhat misshapen (it takes some practice to get stars to look right! Don't worry too much about having these difficulties), and the mouth is somewhat iffy in it's shape for me. The dialogue is a bit awkwardly worded (and Pop Star is two words), but for me, the main issue here is the shading. The shading here is very pillow-shaded, as in, it's present on all sides with an inconsistent light source. This is an extremely amateur and very ineffective and unappealing method of shading, so it doesn't make for a great aspect of this entry. It's far from a bad entry, but it's got a few flaws that hurt it a tad.
Next up is TheGreenShyGuy's entry. It's a scene based on Raize and Not-Raize's Battleship duel in Master of Puppets, or at least, the fact that Raize plays Battleship at all. As far as the art goes, it's... not that great. It's extremely obviously copy-and-pasted, and the expressions of Raize don't really fit all too well at all. The background has some severe perspective issues, and there are clear transparency issues in dragging the art of Raize onto the background that show in the white dots surrounding him. The shading is very minimal, but is a bit too large and dark-colored to fit well on the drawing, and the background itself is somewhat odd in that it's some sort of unspecified house area that doesn't exist in the comic and seems to have just been made up. It's also hard to tell what Raize exactly is standing on.
As far as the joke goes, it's also a bit questionable. TGSG seems to have interpreted the Battleship duel as Raize being bad at the game, and yet that was never really established ever? All that was mentioned was the fact that Raize guessed that he was in the middle of losing their initial match when it got interrupted. Furthermore, the game of Battleship, while having a definite degree of strategy, is also based quite a bit on luck, so the best way to determine one's skill at the game would be multiple games. A single missed guess and a follow-up hit doesn't mean anything about Raize's perceived lack-of-skill at the game in this comic. As a whole, this joke doesn't really work at all, sorry to say.
This entry was drawn by KHKirby, and depicts the scene from Pay Day with Bandy and Fettuccine giving Kirby his vacation. The joke works well here, mostly replicating the general idea of Pay Day except with new dialogue. The footnote is especially good for the joke, referencing Mass Attack well. The new details added such as the additions on the bulletin board, the banner, and Fettuccine's pamphlets are all great touches, and in the end, I only have a few qualms with the picture. For one, Kirby's colors end up making him look a bit too much like Kaxo. It's either the chosen utensils were too red to begin with, or the digital touch-ups made it come out too red. Either way, that's something to look out for next time. Secondly, Bandy's face is a bit misshapen and should probably have come out looking more like Fettuccine's. Thirdly, the shapes of all the characters' feet are a bit off, and I think it's due to them being a bit too tall. Fourthly, and this the only really major issue, is that with all the details in the picture, especially in the background, it makes it hard to focus on the characters in this. All the linework and heavy detail makes the entire piece a bit too cluttered and messy, which is fairly detrimental. The piece itself works rather well except for that issue, so next time, I would try and either reduce the detail or up the contrast between the characters and background so it's easier for the eyes to focus on what's important in the piece.
After that is this piece by Rendum. It's sort of hard for me to critique this one without coming across as mean, but I'll do my best. To put it simply, Rendum, you need to practice more with art if you want to take art seriously in the future. For one thing, I'd definitely recommend not relying on the circle tool in the future, and trying to do things more free-hand. It not only makes the resulting art more awkward looking, but the contrast between free-hand and circle tool is too extreme to look anywhere near good without extensive practice and work. The pose itself is also rather questionable, as Kirby seems to be shouting? There's nothing really in the picture to get him to scream like that, unless he's trying to inhale, but the art doesn't really convey what exactly he's doing here. In the end, while this piece is not very good at all, all I can really say is to keep practicing with your art, asking others for advice and critique, and just keep trying to better yourself.
Falcon_Pawnch75 made this as a joke entry. I'm not judging this one at all, I just felt like sharing a hilariously meme-y piece. Enjoy it however you may, or despise it, I don't care.
The ninth and final entry for this art contest was drawn by CapedLuigisYoshi, depicting a scene from the 400th Page special: What Vezo would change in the history of the comic. As a whole, the piece works really well. It wordlessly expresses everything from the original comic: Vezo wanting to be superior, Talzo in the fantasy being much weaker, and my Kirbysona's confusion and bewilderment. The art does a great job at bringing the extremely 2D background into the "third" dimension, and while the colors in the drawing are a bit obnoxiously bright, that's not something I can criticize CLY for without being majorly hypocritical considering those are the same colors I myself questioningly made that room. The characters themselves are drawn nicely, with the only issues I can see being the wings on the Cutter hat are a tad bit small, and Ultimate Kirby's blushes are a bit oddly placed and shaped. The shading of the piece is very nicely done, and the composition works rather well. As a whole, this is definitely a very great entry.
And in the end, that's all nine entries I received. So who won?
I'll be awarding the reward of "Winner of the 4th Art Contest" tooo... CapedLuigisYoshi! Congratulations, your entry gives you the chance to make a character for Kirby Adventure! I'll be sending you a specific private message with more details in the next few days.
For now, that's all I've got to say, so thanks for everyone who entered, and hopefully the wait between Kirby Adventure comics this hiatus isn't quite as long as the last wait.